Welcome to Part 7 of my Virtual Balticon panel writeup.
It’s hard to cut out scenes or characters that you love, but your story may be better off without them. How do you learn to recognize when something has to go, and how do you reconnect any threads that run through the parts you’re removing?
These are my notes from the titular panel at Virtual Balticon 54. The panelists were: E.C. Ambrose (as moderator), Kim Hargan, Julayne Hughes, Nick Martell, and the writer guest of honor, Wen Spencer.
Editing can be painful. But it doesn’t just hurt the novice, even experienced, award-winning authors can suffer the pain.
Ways of Handling Painful Edits
Nick Martell once cut 100,000 words. Then, he basically rewrote the manuscript. He hated it at the time, but made it better. He doesn’t regret it for a minute.
Julayne Hughes – In her first short story published in an online magazine, there was a beautiful, long description… gorgeous writing and it felt like “just a punch in the stomach” to her when she deleted it. But it sold.
As an editor, she has told authors to cut chapters. She will justify the cut and the authors typically agree with her.
Wen Spencer usually walks around, stomps and screams when she needs to make painful edits.
One example: while on contract, Wen wrote 50k about a slave on a ship. Then, realized the character needed free will. So, turned her into a freelance translator. Then, realized she needed to go over there. So 2 boats, with the character working for the other boat. THEN. Threw that away and started with going off somewhere else. So, rewriting the opening is part of her process.
E.C. Ambrose prefers painful edit notes via email, not live or via phone. (A thought I 100% concur with.)
How to figure out what needs to change in your story
While the big picture can be easy to plan, the details are often where everything goes off the rails.
- If you’ve gotten a rejection letter with a clear complaint? Start there.
- If you outline, (and you can outline after your drafts are done), do you want it to be good or bad for the character? Usually, you want to escalate the conflict. You can also try checking your chapter pacing against beat sheets (see: Jami Gold’s great selection)
- Does the story track? It has to be logical that the character does what they do. Although, there is a difference between what’s happening and what the character knows.
- Ask your beta readers — one reader might be off the track, but if multiple beta readers are saying the same thing — you’ve got a problem.
Tips for those painful edits
- Let it set.
- Outline what you ACTUALLY wrote, not what you intended to write and see how that affects the pacing and character development. See if plot lines or side characters are dropped. Etc.
- Change the font
- Read it out loud (or use an app: naturalReader.com or apple accessibility features)
- Check your time-table/travel — don’t hesitate to map it out and use spreadsheets
- When making a change, start at the beginning of the scene and work your way through
- When cutting a scene, reread the previous chapter and the remaining sequel to make sure it still flows.
- Note: Just because you cut a scene or setting, doesn’t mean you have to eradicate all mentions of it. Wen once HAD a magic school but left references in as a “we wish we could, it was back in the day”, that way the ruins, etc were still cultural touchstones.
- Make sure all your characters are needed and three-dimensional. A lot of times, especially if multiple characters are fulfilling the same role, you can consolidate those characters into one. The more reoccurring characters, the harder it is on the reader. And one shot characters don’t need names.
- Sometimes, you’ve gotta take the full draft, use it as a reference, but re-write and reorganize the whole thing from scratch.
No matter if you’re the one deciding to completely revamp your novel, or the suggestion is coming from a beta-reader or editor, it’s hard to set aside the pages and chapters that you spent so long on.
I do tend to overwrite, and from experience, I know that I like the finished product a lot better when I’ve streamlined my story by cutting about a fifth.
A final thought. One of the most nebulous complaints we try to fix as authors is: ‘I just didn’t connect’. While you don’t actually need to have a likable main character, you do need a relatable character. That, plus a clear setting can go a long way toward helping immerse the reader.
Have you struggled with knowing how to fix your writing? How did you figure out what was needed? And how did you fix it? Did it work?
Thanks for reading, and I’ll be back again next Thursday with more writing tips and writerly musings.