Morgan’s Query Corner:
Fresh Eyes For Your Query Quandaries
PREDESTINED is a contemporary fantasy set in a magic school.
When Evie’s crush, Justin, offers to use his dark magic to help unlock her magic, she’s horrified. Now, the race is on for her to master her magic before the darkness consumes Justin.
PREDESTINED sounds like a solid magic school fantasy.
A couple of things to think about:
- The ‘clumsy’ girl is a bit of an overdone trope at this point. I’d skip using it in the query.
- Give details – keeping things vague show how you’re like your genre, details show how you’re different.
- Focus on the stakes more than world building.
Dear [Mr./Ms. Agent Name Here],
Evie, a clumsy sixteen-year-old, is finally selected for something! Invited to train in the safety of Haven High, a special facility for the supernaturally gifted, Evie travels into a pocket dimension near her hometown in North Carolina. James Cabot, whose icy blue eyes have distracted her since… forever, can control fire, but no matter how hard Evie tries to coax her unknown power into being, it remains unresponsive. Evie finds some comfort in the warrior angels that train her, but absolutely nothing in her life prepared her to fight the things that fill the night.
Just as her fear and frustration are at their height, she finds out that she is the key to keeping the balance while evil fights to overpower the light. Hoping her first date with James will spark her power and change her luck, Evie follows him to an abandoned part of campus. To her horror, he attempts to coerce her into abandoning the light, joining him, and forsake her destiny as the balance keeper. Just as she begins to understand her own gift over the air, Evie launches a battle against James and all of darkness, quickly discovering that true power isn’t manipulating flames, water, earth, or wind, but in mankind’s ability to choose.
As Evie’s new team of classmates and sentinels gather to face off against evil itself, the balance teeters towards destruction and eternal darkness. Evie must learn to effectively weaponize air in time to keep the balance and rescue James from becoming a slave to darkness.
PREDESTINED is a 70,000-word fantasy novel.
When I’m not writing, I’m [job] in [place].
Thank you for your time and consideration.
A creepy sounding magical high school adventure–full of consequences and stakes!
Best of luck to Q27!
And for the rest of you out there?
Best of luck in the query trenches!