ALL THE GOOD PEOPLE is a Women’s Fiction novel about several generations of women in a single family – unlucky-in-love and dealing with the consequences.

Lucy, whose husband’s brother helps her and her daughter during her husband’s hospitalization.

And her granddaughter, Annabelle, whose groom’s apathy shoves her into another man’s bed–on her wedding night.

RENDER is a contemporary fantasy where secret telepaths can hack other people’s brains and manipulate their realities.

When medical resident, Dr. Kivrin Welch’s ex-boyfriend shows up, wanted for assassinating the senator he was paid to protect. That’s when she learns about renderers — telepathic mind hackers. Her ex admits he’s one, but someone’s learned how to turn rending into physical actions. How can they clear his name when his body did the killing?

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PREDESTINED is a contemporary fantasy set in a magic school.

When Evie’s crush, Justin, offers to use his dark magic to help unlock her magic, she’s horrified. Now, the race is on for her to master her magic before the darkness consumes Justin.

Overall Impression:

PREDESTINED sounds like a solid magic school fantasy.

A couple of things to think about:

• The ‘clumsy’ girl is a bit of an overdone trope at this point. I’d skip using it in the query.
• Give details – keeping things vague show how you’re like your genre, details show how you’re different.
• Focus on the stakes more than world building.

Welcome to:

Morgan’s Query Corner:

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PREDESTINED is a contemporary fantasy set in a magic school.

When Evie’s crush, Justin, offers to use his dark magic to help unlock her magic, she’s horrified. Now, the race is on for her to master her magic before the darkness consumes Justin.

Overall Impression:

PREDESTINED sounds like a solid magic school fantasy.

A couple of things to think about:

• The ‘clumsy’ girl is a bit of an overdone trope at this point. I’d skip using it in the query.
• Give details – keeping things vague show how you’re like your genre, details show how you’re different.
• Focus on the stakes more than world building.

Welcome to:

Morgan’s Query Corner:

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WHEN DREAMS COLLIDE is an adult contemporary romance with hints of magical realism.

Awakened from a coma, Josh Michaels learns his beloved wife was a dream. Meanwhile, Maggie Forsett dreams of a better life–and her dream lover. When they’re drawn together in real life, can reality ever match a dream?

Overall Impression:

WHEN DREAMS COLLIDE sounds like a sweet romance with some of the genre’s favorite tropes — comas, dreams, meant-to-be.

Some agents like a tagline first, so I’m going to leave that in here. Good job showing both character’s points-of-view and showing what they want.

A couple of things to think about:

• Give details – keeping things vague show how you’re like all the other romances, details show how you’re different
• Try to tell each character’s paragraph in their voice, but keep it in the 3rd person present tense